2006-04-10 | 7:48 a.m.
Username & diary title: (5/10) allyboo4u90 - This is TERRIBLE! I'll assume you were really young when you chose this & became attached. But, it's still a mockery of yourself & the English language. Fly High. - It's a reference to your swinging girl layout, clearly. It's cute in contrast with it, but not so much alone. It kind of sounds like some sort of drug terminology & that's not pretty.
First Impression: (10/20) You have a bit of color clashing & the blue is WAY overdone. The image is cute, though. You have no 'previous' & 'next' links. What's wrong with you?!
Layout: (15/50) Fallen Star Designs. I don't remember seeing this design on the site, but, of course, I haven't looked at every one. It doesn't look to be a typical FSD layout, though. Theirs are usually a lot cleaner & more intricately designed. This is just too messy & simple. The image is nice, but would match-up with a better shade of blue, I think. Maybe red links for a bit of extra color. The links would look better in a sidebar or link box, instead of crammed together at the top. The Chatterbox at the bottom of your entries is HORRIFIC! It makes what little that looks "okay" in this layout - a mess. You also have no 'previous' & 'next' links, which is super annoying for a not-so-regular reader & a reviewer. No one wants to travel back & forth between your archives page to read your past week's entries. Speaking of your archive page ... It has a different design than your main page. Oops! You might want to fix that.
Content: (20/55) I didn't read very many of your entries, due to the lack of 'prev' &' next' links. Maybe 10-15. I noticed quite a bit of ... slang, grammar errors, & use of the word 'like' in almost every entry I read. I figure you probably write as you speak, which makes me question your ability to talk like anything but a Valley Girl, so I tried to overlook that. Lately your entries have been either vague or about the break-up with Andy. I can deal with the break-up entries (as long as they don't go on for months), but the rhetorical, confusing, vague entries, I can definitely do without. I usually imagined it had something to do with Andy, or maybe a friend of yours, but I can never be sure without a name or explanation. (Example.) You try to use metaphors & similes in your writing, it seems, to make it more elegant & appealing (or maybe you're just no good at words), but it usually comes off sounding awkward & nonsensical. This is an example of what I'm talking about:
It's almost like with everyone word he said (or yelled, whichever way you want to put it), but with every word he said, I could hear another piece of my heart falling to the floor like pieces of glass. Like my heart is glass and every word said is just another smash into it.
Do you understand? Even though you were probably being heartfelt & completely serious when you said things like that, I still found myself giggling at times, because of how ridiculous it sounds. Say it aloud if you don't believe me. Although I could partially relate to your diary (every girl's been to school, had problems with friends, & gone through a tragic break-up), it seemed a bit too normal & frankly, not written well enough. There are a million diaries of teenage girls out there with the same problems as you, what makes yours unique?
Contact: (3/5) Chatterbox. Notes. Guestbook.
Extras: (0/10) I didn't find any!
Am I Linked: (0/5) I didn't find the link anywhere. No points for you!
Favorite Entries: (10/X) One. - Sacrifices must be made on BOTH sides. Two. - You DO sound stuck-up & undeserving of even being able to THINK about this subject.
5 Words to Describe You: Superficial. Heartbroken. Selfish. Dependent. Stuck-up: Meaning: Not as nice as you may think you are.
Memorable Quotes:
i'm so thankful for kaylee. last night when everything went downward, and i shut my phone, i knew i needed someone to talk to. i had about 3-4 girls in mind i knew i could call, but then again i didn't know which was best. i did need someone who would listen, but not tell me how bad of a boyfriend he is and how i need better because one, that's false and two, not the feedback i was looking for.
So, let me get this straight ... You went to the one friend you knew would agree with you to get 'honest' advice on a situation, because you knew your other friends would give you their honest advice/opinions, but it just wasn't what you wanted to hear...? Honey, if I needed sincere advice on something, I would go to the most honest, unbiased person that I know - Not my best friend, who would obviously agree with anything I said.
Your song: Ashlee Simpson - (some song). Your diary layout (mixed with your personality) made me think of Ashlee Simpson a bit. I don't know exactly which song it was that got stuck in my head, but it was one about stealing a boyfriend ...? Maybe you know it.
Your new name: Paris. Regardless of your like or dislike for Ms. Hilton, you reminded me of her several times. From some silly comment about giant sunglasses to your demeaning way of looking at people.
Your lyrics: Ashley Monroe - Satisfied. [I apologize for the counry music (I'm VERY diverse), but I thought it seemed fitting to your situation.]
I want him but he don't want me, .
He wants somebody else that I can't be.
And she's got a man that she wants to leave,
'Cause he can't seem to make her happy.
See that man walkin' down the street,
Yeah, what are the odds, he's the one for me?
And what if I pass him by an' he's got the love I need?
Personal Advice: This entry really struck a note with me. I don't know exactly how old you are, but I would imagine between the ages of 14-17. If you're any younger, you shouldn't be dating in the first place, & if you're older, you obviously haven't realized the value of love yet. I went through a crappy, little break-up when I was 16. I dated a boy for two years. It was the happiest, yet most miserable two years of my life. I thought I was in love & cried & tried to get back together with him ... until I realized I didn't really love him. He was a complete jackass (especially for treating me & dumping me the way he did). I was in love with the idea of being in love & not being alone. I found comfort in always having that someone there - no matter what. After I realized that, I moved on ... & he didn't. He tried on several occassions to get back together with me, but I rejected him, because I knew I didn't need or want him. I hope that with time you can come to know that you're probably a lot better off without him. It's hard to get to know yourself when you're constantly trying to be something for that person. Take a time-out & think about if you were truly happy with him or the idea of being with someone. Get to know yourself - hang out with friends, talk to other guys, do the things he wouldn't let you/didn't want you doing. Show him how much of you he was missing before, don't just sit around & mope.
Comments: I would suggest a new template, a few extras, & keep the chatterbox as far away from your entry box as possible. Also, PLEASE add 'previous' & 'next' links. I would have read more entries, had there been any.
Would I Come Back: (15/20) Probably. If for no other reason than to see how you're handling the break-up.
Total Score: 78/200
[reviewed by: Mandy]