2004-03-10 | 4:48 p.m.
I miss you...
Username: [3/10 points] Well, the bad thing about a re-review is that you can't change your name. It's just your name and it's utterly uninteresting. Although it's a pretty name that I'm sure your proud to have, it doesn't make me want to read your diary. That's the point of a creative username, no?
First Impression: [12/20 points] Dark and depressing. The layout reminds me of that Blink 182 video of "I Miss You" or maybe it's just the I miss you quote. Hmm. I don't think my eyes are going to enjoy this one. The links and such look a bit crowded.
Content: [35/55 points] Well, you didn't have a large amount of entries, so I thought I might try to read them all. The first thing I noticed from the first and most recent entries, was that you don't capitalize anything. I find that supremely annoying, especially on a black and white layout. It makes it stand out more to me. I noticed you used the word "insanely" to describe a lot of things in some of your older entries. Variety, my darling, is an interesting thing. At other times it seems like you use the wrong adjective to describe things and it sounds strange. Don't use words you don't know to make yourself sound smart. It doesn't work. You also spoke highly of this "Lauren Zanker" person, but you don't have a cast page that tells me who she is. I assume she's a good friend of yours, but I feel left out a little. This entry bugged me. It doesn't really have a point and then you end it with "GO PANTHERS!" It's whack. I could actually feel you getting more depressed as I read more. It's a good thing that you started getting your feelings across better, but it's a bad thing to get depressed. I know this entry is supposed to be embarassing for you, but I found it quite the opposite. You should have took advantage of the situation instead of being hurt by it. I think we have very disimiliar attitudes and if we were in the "real world" you would probably never speak to me. I didn't really enjoy reading your diary that much, because it seemed as though you repeated the same dilemmas over and over again. I did like the deeper pieces of writing sprinkled around, like here and here.
Layout: [20/40 points] Designed by: Fallen Star Designs. It's dark and depressing. I find that a little heartbreaking since you had a gorgeous Something Corporate layout last time you were reviewed. The color scheme here is way too drab, even for you. The navigation is a little untidy because you have a pretty long list of links piling up there. You should add some to the extras page or make a contact page to clean that up. I hate the dailies, loves, and hates on the side. If you find it necessary to have it, make it a seperate page and turn it into an extra. It clogs up the layout and makes it look very unclean when it's layered down the sides. I just don't like this layout. It doesn't seem to suit you very well either. It certainly has the whole deep, dark, and depressed thing going on, but it doesn't emit the right sort of sadness you're trying to express, in my opinion.
Contact: [3/5 points] Notes. Guestbook. IM.
Personality: Lonely. Cutter. Manic Depressive. Typical teenager. Shy. Easily embarassed. Confused. Empty. Honestly trying to find yourself. Focused.
Extras: [10/10 points] Diary-x diary [xxsacredscar]. Dedications. Writings. Rings. Peices of You. Reviews. Loves. Dailes. Hates. I-mood. Counter. My ABC's. Me, defined. Countdown. Quizzes. I must ask, why aren't the rings, reviews, dedications, etc... listed on your extras page? It would clean up the navigation a bit.
Am I linked: [5/5 points] I am! I am! Thanks ever so much!
Favorite entries: [25/25 points] One, Two [beautiful], Three, Four, Five.
Originality: [10/10 points] I got a feeling that you were writing purely for yourself and that's original in the wide world of reviewing. Plus, I didn't see you trying to fit a mold of who or what you're supposed to be. You're definitely something else.
Quotes:
"ive just been in "a mood". i dont know. lifes been barfy."[I found that amusing, because I've never heard someone call life "barfy" before. Good one!]
Most Memorable: Your thoughts on your mother. The way you slowly fell into depression.
Comments: Although I didn't enjoy reading much of your diary, you are a remarkable girl. I was more interested in you as a person, than anything else. Your writing needs to grow a wee bit more before you can express yourself to the fullest extent, and I definitely want to know how it develops. I predict great things for you. Just wait and watch.
Would I come back: [20/20 points] I'll be back, baby.
Total: [143/200]
[reviewed by: Mandy].