2006-04-26 | 10:15 a.m.
Username & Diary title: (3/10) Cort-Virgo - I'm not sure of its meaning, but I would take a stab & say your name is Cortney (sp?) & you're possibly ... a Virgo? It doesn't seem very unique, but I do like astrology ... it will do. (2 points) [i know i will figure all this out one day ...] - A little melodramatic, a little ho-hum, & not very eye-catching. (1 points)
First Impression: (10/20) Blast! It looks cluttered; however, the colors are nice.
Layout: (35/50) Fallen Star Designs. In general, it is a nice layout - everything matches, everything functions, & the image is relatively attractive. I don't like the white font, though. There is practically no white in the image, & the onslaught of white writing overpowers the muted colors in the layout & makes it look harsh.
The chatterbox should be on a separate page. It stretches past most of your entries & looks a jumbled mess on the main page.
The archives page is FUCKED UP! Have you looked at it? The links are showing up everywhere, changing before my eyes, & there are three images! You definitely need to fix that. I can't even view your archives, dear, & that's a big problem for me.
You have a nice layout, & with a few alterations, it would be gorgeous. The biggest problem I see is clutter & the archives, right now. Aside from that, it's perfect!
Content: (20/55) I started here. Jesus! I could say so many things about this entry alone. First, it's one giant paragraph. Not only does it look terrible; it’s wrong. I do understand how it IS one giant paragraph though ... because you rarely ever end a sentence! You just use ellipsis & connect everything with "and." This is a sentence for you:
john came home and me and him started officially going out and he left for 2 weeks and came back and these past 2 weeks have been the best of my life... i really dont know where to start...a part of me is scared that things with me and him arent real but when i look at him and he tells me i love you its awesome... i can honestly say he is completely different from any other guy i have ever been with...He wants the best for me and he will do anything for me and i would do the same for him... idk i wish i knew how to describe it... tomorrow we will have been together for a month and i cant believe it...it has flown by... he is the first guy i have been able to be w/ whenever i want to besides when he is gone and go out and have fun with lol like saturday night me and him and some friends went to the street races at memphis it was crazy watching people at 1:30 in the morning hiding from the police just to race lol now that i look back on the past i realize everything happens for a reason and i am a strong person because of it the part that scares me though is i cant help but wonder if things w/me and john are going to turn out like my past relationships?You use a lot of slang, it seems to shorten things up - (w/e -weekend, w/ - with, goin - going) - things like that. I don't mind so much, because I understand that you might be in a hurry, or you just don't like to type that much, but it does get annoying when I don't understand it. Or when you make severe typos that make me misread/misunderstand your entire point. If I were judging your grammar, spelling, & punctuation, you would be so DEAD! But ... I'm not, so you can breath easy. Just try to pay more attention to what you're typing & stop making run-on sentences.This would be a typical entry for you. You mention the important things, maybe give a teensy-tiny sliver of how you feel about it, tell everyone you love them, & end it. Sure, we love to hear the important things, but how do they make you feel? Why did you & TJ break up? How did he divorce effect you? What happened to Holly & why don't you ever mention her anymore? You leave many questions unanswered for a new reader, like myself. Maybe a cast page would help me understand the people you mention. As for the lack of detail about situations, there is nothing you can do about that. It's just a flaw in your writing that may not be a concern to everyone.This would make a cute extra, but it's cluttering up an entry instead. Tsk I ended the review here. It seems all your older entries are just "I did this. I love TJ. Friend drama. Bye y'all!" Nothing interesting. Don't take it too hard, but your diary was a snore. It seems like you edit yourself a lot, I’m assuming, to avoid drama with your friends or to keep things from people that you know. A diary isn't supposed to be censored & since you practice this, your content suffers. I found your entries to be mushy teenage love rants & day logs about school, friends, & what you were doing. Of course, you are only 15, so that is pretty much your life. Maybe with time you will grow & your diary will grow with you, although I see you rarely update it now. It was probably just a fad you were caught up in & have now gotten bored with. If so, discard this review. If not, at least try to take some of my advice.
Contact: (2/5) Chatterbox. Guestbook. Notes (no points - the link doesn't work).
Extras: (1.5/10) About Me. Loves. Hates. (1/2 point per section, because they are barely extras.)
Am I Linked?: (0/5) Nowhere that I can find. Shame!
5 Words to Describe You: Unsure. Friendly. Boy Crazy. Typical 15-year-old. Fun.
Your new name: Kristin. It's bubbly, cute, & fitting for a cell phone toting, boy-hopping hottie, as I imagine you to be.
Your lyrics: Bouncing Souls - The Something Special.
I think about the two of us
I don't know why
I feel good on the inside
It's different now
I'm one, I stand alone
I have to be this way
I have to be this wayForget about
The things I said
I make no
Excuse for them
I want to start again
I want to start again
Personal Advice: I am curious about one thing. Why do you hate being a preachers' kid? My friend's grandfather is a minister & she takes great pride in him & supports him. I don't understand why it's such a big deal to you & it clearly is since it's in the 'Hates' section.
Comments: Fix the archives. Express yourself more in your writing - even if you have to start a new diary (I did). Try to form sentences. Stop using ellipsis. Take down the chatterbox or add it to an extra page.
Would I Come Back: (10/20) Maybe in a year to see how you've changed.
[Reviewed by: Mandy]