Username & Diary Title: (9/10) ifiwere - It has a nice ring to it. It's simple enough to get your point across, without being too pushy & mysterious to make me want to click it. Nice choice! (4 points) ... life is but a dream - Like from the 'Row, row, row your boat song? It is different & doesn't seem to have any relevance to your design. I kind of like it. It has real meaning to it. (5 points)

First Impression: (5/20) Bleagh! Someone puked on your page. Oh, no wait, that's just the color scheme. Oops!

Layout: (20/50) Clearly, it's self-designed. No designer would dare waste their time on making this. It's a booger-colored, imageless design with minimal links. I normally like designs like this, even though I prefer a small image or something for a bit of color, but I hate this color. It's just nasty. Possibly a pale blue or aqua sea foam color would serve it better justice. Red might even work, but this is just an eyesore.

The links at the bottom are confusing, as they do not tell you where you're going when you click on them.

Maybe you were going for a simpleton artsy-fartsy thing or you just didn't want to put that much effort into a layout. Either way, this design is too simple & looks like baby poop. Bonus points for designing it, although I imagine a 5 year old could have done something more creative & colorful ... & complicated.

The archives page is a grotesque black/red design that looks like a color change on a built-in diaryland design. I imagine you tampered with it enough to get what you're trying to pull off as your booger design now, no? If not, I apologize. If so, stop it - & get a real template.

Content: (35/55) This was the first entry I read. It seems simple enough, but hopefully your entries get a bit more complicated than the definition of the word confusion.

Call me old-fashioned, but I don't think using the word texting in a poem is right. It seems so out of place to me. But again, maybe I am just old-fashioned.

Layouts? Wow. You're grasping for a simile there, aren't you, kiddo? I know you were trying to be deep & sincere in his entry, but the comparison to diaryland layouts made me laugh. Now that is just silly.

Something I noticed that I doubt anyone else would is your common use of the word - head. Head.. Head. Head. Head. Proof, enough?

Yours is what I would call a poetry diary. I've read much worse poetry in my day, trust me, but yours was come & go, you know? Sometimes, you would write something beautiful & poetic that made me think & other times, you would write something dull, lifeless, & seeming to be without any emotion behind it at all. In a normal diary, that could be easily ignored, but since a poetry diary practically feeds off emotions; every entry must contain something to captivate the reader. Through most of your diary, I found myself bored. Your entries are relatively short, so you have to be great with words to get your point across in so few, & you rarely did.

Do not stick to one subject matter. You always seemed to be speaking about love or the complications of it & although it is a common & interesting subject - damn near everyone in history has touched upon it. You occasionally blither about a bad day in typical teenage angst mess, but that can be forgiven. Because, hey, haven't we all?

Contact: (1/5) Notes.

Extras: (0/10) None. Shame!

Am I Linked?: (0/5) Nay. Shame, again!

Favorite Entries: (10/X) One. Two.

5 Words to Describe You: Confused. Sincere. Deep Thinker. Grateful. Experienced.

Memorable Quotes: None. Just all the entries were you use the word head.

Your new name: Abilene. It's pretty, unique & seems fit for a poet. In addition, a name I considered for my baby. (Just a tidbit of trivia for you.)

Your lyrics: Built to Spill - You Were Right

You were wrong when you said
Everything's gonna be alright
You were right when you said
All that glitters isn't gold
You were right when you said
All we are is dust in the wind
You were right when you said
We are all just bricks in the wall
And when you said manic depression's a frustrating mess
You were right when you said
You can't always get what you want
You were right when you said
It's a hard rain's gonna fall
You were right when you said
We're still running against the wind
And life goes on after the thrill of living is gone
You were right when you said
This is the end
Do you ever think about it?

Comments: Find a design. I will help you if necessary. But please, please, please get rid of the booger mess. Expand your subject when you're writing, maybe even try to increase the length of your entries.

Would I Come Back: (20/20) Sure. You have a solid, interesting diary.