2006-03-06 | 9:28 a.m.
Username & diary title: (2/10) orchdreamer - "Orch" reminds me of orchid, so I automatically want to change it to "orchiddreamer." I have no idea if that's what you're trying to get across or not, which is mostly why I don't like this username. I don't know what it means. When will these tears stop falling? - Woah. It sounds like BAD lyrics to an old country song. I suppose it could mean something to you, but I imagine it's just a generic line to go along with the layout.
First Impression: (18/20) It seems very neat, clean-cut, & simple. I like it. I like the light brown & sepia tones used, as well. There doesn't appear to be very many links, which can sometimes be a bad thing.
Layout: (40/40) Dive Designs. It's a seemingly nice layout. I prefer designs with more space for links, but I admire the simplicity & sophistication of this particular design. You should probably have a different layout, though, judging by the length of most of your entries. This design looks better (& the entries are easier to read) when you don't have to scroll too much. Aesthetically, this is a great layout, but practically, I would suggest something else.
Contact: (0/5) Surely, being a diaryland user, you at least have notes. However, there is no visible link to any form of contact.
Extras: (0/10) None.
Am I Linked: (0/5) No. No one is.
Content: (15/55) Honestly, I didn't read very much - maybe 15-20 entries back. After reading 2-3 entries, I was REALLY hoping this wasn't a poetry diary, but it seems to be mostly that poetry. Bad, angsty, poorly rhymed, nonsensical, teenage poetry. A few entries would pop up & explain how I assume you were feeling & then I would get pelted with more "Woe is me. Life sucks." poetry. Yes, I am exaggerating your wording a bit, but that is mostly what every poem I read boiled down to, aside from the few about some boy who didn't like you back. I'm sure another girl your ago would probably come along & think you were one of the greatest writers she had ever read, & to her, you may be, but I have experienced many writers who have surpassed you in leaps & bounds. I wasn't impressed, to say the most & didn't read far enough back to see if you had ever written much of anything with any REAL depth & feeling. If you did, I apologize & suggest you try to relive those days. Certainly, this diary is probably your outlet for anger, sadness, heartache, etc ... & all the little poems you write mean something very dear to you, but if you look at most of them, they sound just like a million other poems in the world. Who wants to hear a million & one, right?
Favorite Entries: (5/25) None, but I'll give 5 points because a few made me laugh.
Personality: Wants to be deep & poetic. Selfish. Probably just a teenager trying to find herself, so I shouldn't poke fun.
Quotes:
bring me back
to the life i once knew
when the sky wasn't gray but blue
&
And I almost wish I were there- Curiously, what is a "ray away?"
Standing in the sunlight of this brand new day
And I almost wish these shadows didn’t cast
Darkness like waves upon an endless shore
But sunlight isn’t in the cards today
And happiness doesn’t seem a ray away
Your song: White Stripes - Truth Doesn't Make a Noise. Because it doesn't. Listen, if you haven't already.
Your new name: Allison. You just seem too normal for me to choose something that stands out. Sorry.
You should be: Doing other things you're good at.
You remind me of: Quite frankly, myself when I was a mere teenager.
Comments: Don't try so hard. Poetry isn't about rhyming or sounding good. I's about getting your feelings out & hopefully, feeling better after you do it. Try writing a happy poem! When you're in a good mood, you should write & see what comes up, instead of always writing dreary, run-of-the-mill stuff.
Would I Come Back: (2/20) It's doubtful. Sorry, sweets.
Total Score: 82/190
[reviewed by: Mandy]