2006-04-24 | 11:13 a.m.
Username & diary title: (2/10) sad-eyes08 - Tsk. Tsk. Tsk. It strikes me as juvenile & boring. Yawn. I would assume you were just another angsty diarylander looking for some attention. Holly-Marie - Your name, maybe? Not very original, but if you're proud of it, I guess you can show it off.
First Impression: (20/20) It's cute. There is a nice shade of pale blue & it looks fairly organized, although I don't like the link arrangement.
Layout: (45/50) Bitch & Moan. It is an adorable design, really. The image background color doesn't match the lighter shade, but the designer incorporated it into the layout to make it work (Nice job, B&M!). If I had to find something to complain about, it would be the links & extra space. I have a 'thing' with links being in a horizontal row. It just irks me. I know some layouts are designed that way & there is nothing you can do about it, but it's just a personal bug of mine. I'm not removing any points for it, just letting you know that I think it looks messy. In addition, there is a lot of blue space. You don't write very long entries & that leaves even more blue space at the bottom. It looks ... empty & lifeless with nothing but a small image, few links, & practically no entry. You might opt for a smaller, more confined design that accents your small entries & lack of links, rather than making it looks bland & boring.
Content: (15/55) What did you do, dear? As I started reading back from the most recent entry, I noticed that you would sometimes add the same entry 2-5 times. Maybe it was just a glitch in diaryland, but that's not necessary & really annoying.
This, I think, is a fair representation of most of your entries. Short, quick, somewhat emotional babbles of your day. No one really wants to read, "I did this. It sucked. I'm sad," which is usually how you write.
Your grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc ... is dreadful! I don't normally subtract points for it, because it is tolerable - even on foreign diaries - but yours was so terrible that I couldn't make sense of what you were saying at times. At first, I thought it might just be horrendous typos, but as I read more of your diary, I realized you just couldn’t form a legible sentence.
What the hell is this? I have no idea what you're talking about & I'm almost certain anyone else who would read it would be just as clueless? & again?
You seem to have a hard time keeping your thoughts in order when you do write longer entries, so maybe you're better at confusing shorties. For example, here, you started talking about how you got along great with guys & needed no female companions, then ... your fish died," I miss my mom," night out with t.j., ... & back to how easy it was being friends with guys.
Quite frankly dear, your writing seems a bit immature & too confusing for me to even attempt to follow. If you could express yourself a bit better, I might find you to be a more compelling or interesting writer, but the simplicity of it all bored me. You also have a tendency to repeat yourself, especially when you're excited about something. Ahem, cheerleader try-outs? You said something about it in almost every entry for 2 months.
Contact: (1/5) Notes. An email link, but only to your diaryland name (So, no points).
Extras: (0/10) None. Not even a counter or ugly adoptable blob. Sigh.
Am I Linked: (0/5) Nope.
Favorite Entries: (10/X) One. Two.
5 Words to Describe You: Simple. In love. Hypocrite. Very confused about love, life, & the like. Tossed aside.
Memorable Quotes:
it's funny, i finally get how i thought i wanted to be and i just want to be like i use to be. um yeah if that makes sence.Maybe if you articulated yourself a bit better, it would.
Your song: The Rentals - Friends of Pete. It's about being friends of Pete - & you talked about having/not having friends a lot.
Your new name: Emily. It's a simple name that reminds me of a shy, quiet girl, in the back of the classroom.
Your lyrics: Reckless Kelly - Nobody's Girl
You've always been a little scared to open your heart
And you never let anybody take it too far
You never let em' on the inside
'Cause you're always scared of getting taken for a rideYou're nobody's baby
You're nobody's darlin'
You're nobody's girlEverybody wants you but you don't wanna care
So you keep em' at a distance with the frown you wear
You spend your time trying to even the score
And you've got it in your head you deserve a lot more
The first one was a total disaster
So was the second one and every one after
But when you're breaking in a broken home
You're gonna be sure to spend some nights on your own
Personal Advice: From what I read, it seems that your family has a lot of abuse in it. Do not let that continue, please. For your sake, your younger siblings, & your mother. Next time it happens, do something about it. Call the police - anything. Just don't let it happen. You deserve so much better than that.
Comments: Aesthetically - maybe a new layout. Content - work on expressing yourself better. If necessary, use spell check. The biggest problem I had with your diary was understanding your meaning, because of misspellings & grammar errors, so I suggest you try to acknowledge that more.
Would I Come Back: (10/20) Possibly - just to check on you & make sure you're doing all right.
Total Score: 103/200
[reviewed by: Mandy]